Author Topic: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge. Author thank you message - 7/31
Tahi 
Registered: Jun '02
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Date Posted: 5/21/06 4:03pm Subject: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge. Author thank you message - 7/31 - Date Edited: 7/31/06 8:40pm (2 edits total) Edited By: Tahi
Title: Pilot Song
Author: Tahi
Genre: Poem
A/N: The reference to the scene from Wedge's childhood is based on his biography in the Rogue Squadron comic series profile edition, and to a certain extent to the first scene in The Phantom Affair.

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Pilot Song
(For Wedge)

It was one of those days that live forever:
the hills, lush and green, folding endless
into a distance as huge as the galaxy;
the air earthy, sweetening the palette
with the aroma of mountain grass
moist and cleansed by the morning dew.
And he, a boy, growing sturdy and strong
lavished, cherished by his native sun.

It was the simple joy of the moment:
the warm pelt of the thak beneath him,
the pitch and roll beat of hoof on turf
and he, swaying with the shared rhythm -
a song of union between boy and beast
and land borne buoyant on the wings
of dreams. And his spirits soaring,
and the adoring world falling at his feet.

He still hears the song sometimes, but
it's different now; no longer simple.
The melody is more haunting, layered
with semi-tones of loss and regret.
And the eyes that gazed guileless
into the cathedral dome of the sky
have discovered the abyss, and learned
the warrior's guise of worn indifference.

But the boy is not gone, not altogether.
He catches him sometimes beckoning
from behind the face in the mirror -
senses him creeping through the chinks
in his armoured heart to ride lordly
his dominion from hills to sky and beyond
to the glitter and sweep of stars . . .

where his spirit flies on wings of steel
and the galaxy rejoices at his feet.

~Tahi~

 

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Jade_Pilot 
Registered: Dec '05
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Date Posted: 5/21/06 4:48pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge
Oh my goodness. This is wonderful!!!!


"He catches him sometimes beckoning
from behind the face in the mirror -
senses him creeping through the chinks
in his armoured heart to ride lordly
his dominion from hills to sky and beyond
to the glitter and sweep of stars . . . "


Just beautiful. Bravo! applause

 

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Thrawn McEwok 
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Date Posted: 5/21/06 5:55pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge
Tahi: love That was beautiful!

I can see the basic shape, of course - the way you evoke the innocence of youth, and complicate it with experience, but still, subtly, retain the clear-eyed optimism...

It's very true, and - of course! - very Star Wars... suffice to say, I loved the poem, and I'll hopefully have more to say when I can sort it straight in my head...

Brilliant, though... grin

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BrentusofGath 
Registered: Aug '05
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Date Posted: 5/21/06 6:38pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge
Very fitting and wonderful.

And I thought all you could write was comedy. wink

Bad Brentus, bad!

 

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Maggy 
Registered: Oct '04
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Date Posted: 5/22/06 12:51pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge
Tahi:

that’s just awesome grin applause

like how Wedge sees as a glimps what boy he was once

- Mags

 

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FelsGoddess 
Registered: Sep '04
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Date Posted: 5/22/06 1:34pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge
Very very good, Master. Excellent tone. happy

 

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oldjedinurse 
Registered: Oct '03
Date Posted: 5/22/06 1:40pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge
What an excellent expression of Wedge's character!

I love the echoes of his boyhood dreams in his adult life. Beautiful, just beautiful ... as always!

oldj

 

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YodaKenobi 
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Registered: May '03
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Date Posted: 5/22/06 3:45pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge
Unbelievable, Tahi applause That was so beautiful! *In awe* You use such vivid descriptions in here and the choice of words tickles the ear just right.

This was my favorite section:

He still hears the song sometimes, but
it's different now; no longer simple.
The melody is more haunting, layered
with semi-tones of loss and regret.
And the eyes that gazed guileless
into the cathedral dome of the sky
have discovered the abyss, and learned
the warrior's guise of worn indifference.


Lovely.

I also liked the way you relate it back to Wedge seeing his face in the mirror and finding glimpses of the boy he once was. I'll have to check out that comic now, I'm curious thinking

Fantastic work as usual grin You're certainly a gifted poet, but we've all known that for a long time wink

 

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Knight_Aragorn 
Registered: Jun '03
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Date Posted: 5/23/06 5:38am Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge
Wow, this was amazing, Tahi. Wedge is so right here, and the flow and tone of the poem is just stunning. Wedge's joy in flight is tangible, even through the hardships he's endured as a soldier. You've embodied that so well here... I love it. Well done. applause grin

 

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Tahi 
Registered: Jun '02
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Date Posted: 5/23/06 10:27pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge
Thanks so much for the lovely feedback, everyone. I'll post proper replies as soon as I can. happy

 

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Tahi 
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Date Posted: 5/27/06 8:07pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge
Jade_Pilot
Thanks. happy Lovely to meet a new reader.

Just beautiful. Bravo!
[curtsies] My pleasure. wink

Thrawn
Yep - I always see Wedge as retaining his belief in innocence even when he sees nothing but loss all around him. And I think that there are times when he still just wants to glory in the thrill of flying because he still enjoys the essential purity of the experience. happy

Brentus
LOL There's comedy - and then there's comedy. wink

Maggy
Thanks. happy I'm very fond of Wedge.

Goddess
[waves] Great to see you - and thanks for the feedback on the tone. hugs

ojn
Thanks for that. I'm glad it rang true as a reflection of Wedge's character. happy It's easy to get carried away and use the wrong image in a poem and ruin the effect.

Yoda
the choice of words tickles the ear just right
Hey - I like that phrase. grin That's just what I like to think of the poem doing.

The Dark Horse series of X-Wing Rogue Squadron comics were great IMO. I have most of them in graphic novel form. The Phantom Affair is number 2 in the series, and it has wonderful art work. There's a little section at the start that talks about how a child's view of the world is radically altered by experience - and it's the look of wonder in the child's (I've always read this as being Wedge) eyes that I was trying to capture in the poem.

Thanks for the lovely feedback.

K_A
Thanks for the feednack about the tangible feel. I'm glad that sense of Wedge's feelings about flying came through. It's also good to hear that Wedge comes over credibly in the poem. happy Thanks again.

 

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thusspakezarathustra 
Registered: May '06
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Date Posted: 6/2/06 8:56pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge. Author replies posted 5/27 - Date Edited: 6/6/06 10:46pm (1 edits total) Edited By: thusspakezarathustra
I dabble in a bit of poetry writing so it's nice to see poetry here. I like the structure with the 8 line stanzas and the half rhyme holding it all together - a lot of what I'd call internal rhyme, too. happy And then the last stanza works like a finale in a musical piece - which is fitting as the poem is a "song". happy Fits Wedge like a pilot's glove.

 

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Tahi 
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Date Posted: 6/7/06 5:11pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge. Author replies posted 5/27
Yay! Hi, Zara. Fancy meeting you here. LOL

Seriously thanks for the “up” and the feedback of course. I see you’re finding your way around here. Told you it was a fun place.

(To my friends and readers – Zarathustra is a co-worker who, I discovered, is a closet Star Wars fan. Give her a wave when you see her around.)

 

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LianaMara 
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Date Posted: 6/19/06 12:08am Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge. Author replies posted 5/27
I've never seen the particular X-Wing comic that inspired this poem, Tahi, but thanks to your beautiful imagery ... I can picture the young Wedge, and then the memories fulfilled in the experiences of older Wedge. It's gorgeous. happy

(I'll have to share it with my sister tomorrow.)

 

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Tahi 
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Date Posted: 6/20/06 5:48pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge. Author replies posted 5/27
Yay - good to see you Li. And thanks. happy Glad you liked the imagery as that's a feature I enjoy playing with. wink

Is your sister an X-wing pilot fan?

 

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LianaMara 
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Date Posted: 6/21/06 9:55pm Subject: RE: Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge. Author replies posted 5/27
You're welcome! I love when your poems are built around physical imagery - everything seems so alive, and tangible. happy

She's a bigger X-Wing fan than me; she has all the novels minus one of the Stackpole ones, plus a few of the graphic novels. I also think she's one of the few people who have listened to all the Wraith Squadron novels on audio tape. Her one-mindedness towards that series puts me to shame. wink

(I found your email stuck in a folder again, so I'll shoot off a reply tomorrow. mischief )

 

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